Freedom-An Acrostic

Feelings of peace and tranquility abound
Running our owns lives; no intruders around
Every person living life in harmony and peace
Energy abounds and healthy thoughts increase
Dictators will meet their end as they should
Our friends will stand where they once stood
Men, women, black and white all getting along.

© 2019, Willy B. All rights reserved.

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Willy B
I have been writing for a few years now and I think I am ready to put some of my poetry out there with the hope that other writers will help me to achieve my goal of publishing a poetry book, one day.
Freedom-An Acrostic
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4 thoughts on “Freedom-An Acrostic

  • March 21, 2020 at 6:53 am
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    I like the message, Willy, that this fine write sends, and I sure wish it was the way of the world right now, but…

  • August 31, 2019 at 10:23 am
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    Hello, Denis and thank you so much for both this very handy review and suggestions.

    I was actually trying to write it the way you suggest but after banging my head against the wall a few times I left it and was hoping that a gentleman such as you would come along and help me out and thanks to God, you did.

    I’ll certainly do some work on it and thanks again.

  • August 30, 2019 at 7:45 pm
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    Editing ideas.

    Running our own lives; no intruders around

    (or no strangers around)

    You’ll see that FREEDOM is a 7-letter word and there’s no 8-lined rhyme to follow.
    It’s not easy to follow FREEDOM except as FREEDOMS. So if that was a possible conclusion, then I suggest: A change to the title from FREEDOM to FREEDOMS and then concluding the acrostic with something like this:

    So freedoms like these are what makes us strong!

    • August 31, 2019 at 10:28 am
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      Hello, Denis and thank you for both this very handy review and your suggestions.

      I was actually trying to write it and make it sound like you suggest but after banging my head against the wall several times I left it and was hoping that a gentleman such as yourself would come along and help me out, thanks to God you did.

      I’ll certainly do some work on it and thanks again.

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